A sports day

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The last weekend was a sports day of my son's school.
When it comes to a sports day, a big family including grandparents or relatives gets together to see their children playing and have a lunch together. On the other hand, we have a small family, so I asked my mother-in-law to come and see this event beforehand. However eventually she couldn't come, and to make matters worse, my husband had to work that day.
I felt too lonely to be alone, so I asked my friend to be with me and have lunch together.
She was willing to accept my offer kindly, and as her family got a good watching place by lottery in advance, I was lucky to see children playing at a good spot.

At the lunch time, my son and I admired that her homemade boxed lunch was gorgeous. On the other hand, ours was poor. I made boxed lunch equivalent for two of us, so it was smaller. And to make matters worse, the contents in the lunch box got mess because I put them in the bike's basket to go there. After we came home, my son said that he was embarrassed our poor boxed lunch.

I will make better lunchboxes and take them carefully next year!





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Original Article:

The last weekend was a sports day of my son's school.
When it comes to a sports day, a big family including grandparents or relatives gets together to see their children playing and have a lunch together. On the other hand, we have a small family, so I asked my mother-in-law to come and see this event beforehand. However eventually she couldn't come, and to make matters worse, my husband had to work that day.
I felt too lonely to be alone, so I asked my friend to be with me and have lunch together.
She was willing to accept my offer kindly, and as her family got a good watching place by lottery in advance, I was lucky to see children playing at a good spot.

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Recommended Corrections:

Last weekend was Sports Day at my son's school.
When it comes to Sports Day, it is usually a large family event. Grandparents and other relatives gather at the event to watch the child perform in his sport, and to then have lunch together. As our family is small, I had asked my mother-in-law to attend the event well before hand. She ended up not being able to make it, and to make matters worse, my husband had to work on that day.

I knew I would feel lonely being there with no one else to enjoy the event with, so I asked my friend to accompany me so we could talk and enjoy lunch together. She kindly accepted my offer, and as her family had gotten a good place to watch the event in advance through a lottery system, I felt lucky at having a seat with such a good view of the events.

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Original Article:

At the lunch time, my son and I admired that her homemade boxed lunch was gorgeous. On the other hand, ours was poor. I made boxed lunch equivalent for two of us, so it was smaller. And to make matters worse, the contents in the lunch box got mess because I put them in the bike's basket to go there. After we came home, my son said that he was embarrassed our poor boxed lunch.

I will make better lunchboxes and take them carefully next year!

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Recommended Corrections:

During our lunch together, my son and I admired my friend's gorgeously laid out homemade lunch box. On the other hand, our lunch box seemed to be horribly inadequate in both, the quantity of food, and in its presentation. As I had only made our lunch for my son and I to eat, it was much smaller in comparison. To make matters worse, our lunch box had gotten tossed about in my bike basket during my ride to the event. During lunch, when I opened the lunch box, the contents appeared to be a tousled mess. After we got home, my son said that he was embarrassed by the state of our lunch box.

I will take better care in the making and transportation of our lunch box for next year's Sports Day.


Re: English Corrections

Hi, shiroi tora.

Thank you very much for the corrections.
I learned that I couldn't use the past tense and the past perfect tense correctly yet. And I also learned 'the last weekend' and 'a Sports Day' and so on.

Although my original article and your recommended one had almost the same meaning, I thought that yours was more interesting from the point of story.

A Correction Of My Previous Correction

A Correction Of My Correction (I had erred):

Sakae had emailed me and had asked the difference between a boxed lunch and a lunch box. It was then that I had realized my error. A boxed lunch is a lunch specifically made for travel or to go. The focus is on the food's purpose. A lunch box is the actual container. I made the necessary corrections below.

My original Correction:

Recommended Corrections:

During our lunch together, my son and I admired my friend's gorgeously laid out homemade lunch box. On the other hand, our lunch box seemed to be horribly inadequate in both, the quantity of food, and in its presentation. As I had only made our lunch for my son and I to eat, it was much smaller in comparison. To make matters worse, our lunch box had gotten tossed about in my bike basket during my ride to the event. During lunch, when I opened the lunch box, the contents appeared to be a tousled mess. After we got home, my son said that he was embarrassed by the state of our lunch box.

I will take better care in the making and transportation of our lunch box for next year's Sports Day.

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My Correction Of My Correction:

Recommended Corrections:

During our lunch together, my son and I admired my friend's gorgeously laid out homemade boxed lunch. On the other hand, our boxed lunch seemed to be horribly inadequate in both, the quantity of food, and in its presentation. As I had only made our lunch for my son and I to eat, it was much smaller in comparison. To make matters worse, our lunch box had gotten tossed about in my bike basket during my ride to the event. During lunch, when I opened the lunch box, the contents appeared to be a tousled mess. After we got home, my son said that he was embarrassed by the state of our boxed lunch.

I will take better care in the making and transportation of our boxed lunch for next year's Sports Day.

Re: A Correction Of My Previous Correction

Hi, shiroi tora.

Thank you very much.

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I'm sure your bento was very delicious, regardless of its appearance!

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Hi, Always visiting.

Thank you very much. I hope so.
Nowadays some people order catering service.
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I like handmade things and Ikebana(arranging flowers).
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