a boy living next door 隣の少年

There is a boy, R living next door in my apartment building.
R is one older than my son.

When my son and I saw him for the first time, it was in front of our apartment building.
R was on his way to his home from kindergarten with his mother, and so were we from another kindergarten.
I said to him, "Nice to meet you! His (my son) name is K. Please be his friend and play with him."
He said with clear and loud voice, "No !"
I was surprised to hear that, but I thought he was interesting.

However, my son got along with R very much soon.
They always play together, sometimes with alone and sometimes with their friends. They go to school together every morning. And, as soon as when R joined a soccer club several years ago, my son followed him.
When my son makes a mistake in a soccer game, R always cheers him up.
They are like brothers, and they hardly fight each other.

I've heard from another neighbor (a mother of a boy who used to play together) several years ago that R got very angry with her because he thought she had sneered at his little brother. Of course R misunderstood it, but he asked the neighbor to apologize for it. And he had never left until she apologizes.
Although I forgot whether she apologized or not in the end, I thought R was brave and compassionate.


The other day, three boys including R came to my place to play with my son.
After a while, I heard something to fight. And it got bigger and bigger. When I opened his room door, R and my son were fighting violently like wrestlers and the other two boys were watching them silently. I said, "Stop it!", but they were too excited to listen to me. And I said "Get out or the furniture or even the house would be broken ! Get out now !! "
R was stronger than my son, and then my son got hit and cried, but my son didn't give up.
I saw them fighting violently for the first time, but on the other hand, I thought it was like a fighting between real brothers.

My son never apologizes first even though it is his fault, but R always apologizes first. When another boy and my son had a fight, R recommended that my son should apologize first. Even so, my son has never apologized first though.
I thought that the fight between R and my son was the biggest ever, and I was worried how long it lasted. I didn't know who was to blame, but I recommended that my son should apologize first because he is younger than R. However, he didn't listen to me as usual.

A few days later, R rang our door bell and apologized to my son. Then he did to me as well.
I like him very much. I want him to be the best friend of my son like his brother forever. I know he would help my son when he has a problem.








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Original Article:

There is a boy, R living next door in my apartment building.
R is one older than my son.

When my son and I saw him for the first time, it was in front of our apartment building.
R was on his way to his home from kindergarten with his mother, and so were we from another kindergarten.
I said to him, "Nice to meet you! His (my son) name is K. Please be his friend and play with him."
He said with clear and loud voice, "No !"
I was surprised to hear that, but I thought he was interesting.

However, my son got along with R very much soon.
They always play together, sometimes with alone and sometimes with their friends. They go to school together every morning. And, as soon as when R joined a soccer club several years ago, my son followed him.
When my son makes a mistake in a soccer game, R always cheers him up.
They are like brothers, and they hardly fight each other.

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Recommended Corrections:

There is a boy living next door in my apartment building.
For the sake of privacy, I will refer to him merely as, 'R'.
R is one year older than my son.

When my son and I saw him for the first time, it was in front of our apartment building.
R was on his way home from kindergarten with his mother, as were we, only we had come from a different kindergarten.
I said to him, "Nice to meet you! His (my son) name is K. Please be his friend and play with him."
He said with clear and loud voice, "No !".
I was surprised to hear this, but I thought he was interesting.

It was only a short time later that my son and R had become fast friends.
They always play together, sometimes just them, and sometimes with their friends. They go to school together every morning. And, as soon as R joined a soccer club several years ago, my son also joined.
When my son makes a mistake during his soccer game, R always cheers him up.
They are like brothers, *only they hardly fight with each other.

*Brothers often fight.

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Original Article:

I've heard from another neighbor (a mother of a boy who used to play together) several years ago that R got very angry with her because he thought she had sneered at his little brother. Of course R misunderstood it, but he asked the neighbor to apologize for it. And he had never left until she apologizes.
Although I forgot whether she apologized or not in the end, I thought R was brave and compassionate.


The other day, three boys including R came to my place to play with my son.
After a while, I heard something to fight. And it got bigger and bigger. When I opened his room door, R and my son were fighting violently like wrestlers and the other two boys were watching them silently. I said, "Stop it!", but they were too excited to listen to me. And I said "Get out or the furniture or even the house would be broken ! Get out now !! "
R was stronger than my son, and then my son got hit and cried, but my son didn't give up.
I saw them fighting violently for the first time, but on the other hand, I thought it was like a fighting between real brothers.

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Recommended Corrections:

I'd heard from another neighbor (a mother of a boy who used to play with R), several years ago, that R got very angry with her because he thought she had sneered at his little brother. Of course, R had misunderstood the situation. However, because R thought he was right, he had demanded that the neighbor apologize for her rudeness. He said he would not leave until she had done so.
Although I forgot whether she apologized or not in the end, I thought R was brave and compassionate.

* I had taken out this sentence as it conflicts with the following sentence (And he had never left until she apologized). Both cannot be valid.


The other day, three boys, including R, came to my place to play with my son.
After a while, I heard a loud commotion coming from my son's room. As the noise continued to escalate, I ran to see what the problem was. When I opened his room door, R and my son were fighting violently like wrestlers as the other two boys were watching them silently. I said, "Stop it!", but they were too excited to listen to me. And I said "Get out, or the furniture, or even the house will be wrecked! Get out now !! "
R was stronger than my son, but my son is strong willed. As a result, my son eventually got hit and cried, but still, he didn't give up.
I saw them fighting violently for the first time, but on the other hand, I thought it was like a fight real brothers would have.

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Original Article:

My son never apologizes first even though it is his fault, but R always apologizes first. When another boy and my son had a fight, R recommended that my son should apologize first. Even so, my son has never apologized first though.
I thought that the fight between R and my son was the biggest ever, and I was worried how long it lasted. I didn't know who was to blame, but I recommended that my son should apologize first because he is younger than R. However, he didn't listen to me as usual.

A few days later, R rang our door bell and apologized to my son. Then he did to me as well.
I like him very much. I want him to be the best friend of my son like his brother forever. I know he would help my son when he has a problem.


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Recommended Corrections:

My son never apologizes first, even when it is his fault. However, R always apologizes first. When another boy and my son had a fight, R recommended that my son apologize first. Even when R had recommended that my son be the first to apologize, he still refused. My son has never apologized first.

I thought that the fight between R and my son was the biggest ever, and I was worried about how long it had lasted. I didn't know who was to blame, but I told my son that he should apologize first because he is younger than R. However, as usual, he didn't listen to me.

A few days later, R rang our door bell and apologized to my son. He then apologized to me as well.
I like him very much. I want him to be my son's best friend. I would love for them to be like brothers, forever. I know he would not hesitate to help my son in his time of need.

Re: English Corrections

Hello, Shiroi Tora.

Thank you very much for the corrections.

I have two questions.

Question 1
As for 'I was surprised to hear this' you corrected,
Although I've usually heard '~ to hear that', what is the difference between this and that?

Question 2
You said, *Both cannot be valid.
Which sentences did you point as 'both'?


Answer to Sakae's questions

Sakae's Questions:

I have two questions.

Question 1
As for 'I was surprised to hear this' you corrected,
Although I've usually heard '~ to hear that', what is the difference between this and that?

Question 2
You said, *Both cannot be valid.
Which sentences did you point as 'both'?

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My answers:

#1 - Usually when you give a direct quote, you would say 'this', as you are referring directly to the given quote (as in this right here, the exact quote). Were you to have paraphrased, then you would have said 'that' (as in that which he had said but was not directly quoted here previously).

#2 - The sentence given and the one following that one in the original article. You had stated that he had not left until she had apologized.Then, in the following sentence, you said that you were not sure whether or not she had apologized. They directly contradict each other. You were sure he had not left until she had apologized. Then you said you were not sure if she had. Both cannot be so.

I hope this clears things up.

Re: Answer to Sakae's questions

Hi, Shiroi Tora.

Thank you very much.
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I'm married and we have a son. I live in Hokkaido, Japan.
I like handmade things and Ikebana(arranging flowers).
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