the result of a general checkup

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Although I've had some checkups of some parts of my body once in a while, I had a general checkup for the first time in about ten years.
I had thought that I was quite healthy, but I was shocked to see the result. It was not so serious, but I knew I had some small problems in my body.
The worst problem of my body was that my cholesterol level was higher than the reference range, so I had to go to a doctor. The doctor said that as it was not so serious, I should exercise more and watch out for foods I have.

I was sorry that I have to keep away from cream puffs which are one of my fovorite sweets. In addition, I can't bake cakes as many times as before.

The other day, I made Pickled Herring and Daikon radish with my friend as usual. I also have to watch out not to have too much those pickles which contain some salt.

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↑Pickled Herring (recipe)

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↑Pickled Daikon radish (recipe)







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Original Article:

Although I've had some checkups of some parts of my body once in a while, I had a general checkup for the first time in about ten years.
I had thought that I was quite healthy, but I was shocked to see the result. It was not so serious, but I knew I had some small problems in my body.
The worst problem of my body was that my cholesterol level was higher than the reference range, so I had to go to a doctor. The doctor said that as it was not so serious, I should exercise more and watch out for foods I have.

I was sorry that I have to keep away from cream puffs which are one of my fovorite sweets. In addition, I can't bake cakes as many times as before.

The other day, I made Pickled Herring and Daikon radish with my friend as usual. I also have to watch out not to have too much those pickles which contain some salt.

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Recommended Corrections:

Although I've had some partial checkups once in a while, I just had a general checkup for the first time in about ten years.
I had thought that I was quite healthy, but I was shocked to see the results.
Although none of them was serious, the most disconcerting result was that my cholesterol level was higher than the reference range. This made me concerned enough to make an appointment with my doctor. My doctor said that as it was not so serious, I only needed to exercise more and to eat more healthfully.

I was sorry that I have to keep away from cream puffs, which are one of my favorite sweets. In addition, I can't bake cakes so often as before.

The other day, I made Pickled Herring and *Pickled Daikon with my friend, as usual. I also have to watch out to not eat these pickles so often, as they contain a lot of sodium.

*If you say, 'Pickled Herring and Daikon', it means that it is one dish.
By saying, 'Pickled Herring and Pickled Daikon', it indicates that the two are separate entities.

Re: English Corrections

Hi, Shiroi Tora.

Thank you very much for the corrections.

Is the title correct? I was wondering whether 'the result of a general checkup', 'a result of the general checkup', 'a result of a general checkup', or 'the result of the general checkup'.
Please tell me about it.

Answer to Sakae's question

Sakae's Question:

Is the title correct? I was wondering whether 'the result of a general checkup', 'a result of the general checkup', 'a result of a general checkup', or 'the result of the general checkup'.
Please tell me about it.

My Reply:

Technically, yes, it is correct (although not the best form). However, language is more than being technically correct. It is not only about being precise and concise...it is also about guiding the thoughts of the readers...to be able to make them feel a certain way. The title may be purposely vague to create suspense...it may be used to allude to a surprise ending or for any number of things the author wishes for the audience to be prepared for.

As I don't know your intent, I can only say that to make the title more precise and concise, I would have titled it: 'My General *Check-up **Results'

*Either Checkup or Check-up may be used.

*I am assuming you had gotten more than one result.

Re: Answer to Sakae's question

Hi, Shiroi Tora.

Thank you very much.
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