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Spring has come here !

I changed my hair style a little.

Several weeks ago, I called my favorite hair salon to book, but unfortunately it was fully booked already on that day. I then called there again a week later, but it was busy again.
I remembered that my friend had recommended me her favorite hair salon, so I booked and went there for the first time.

The salon was more spacious than the outside appearance, and there were many staff there. While I was waiting, I filled in a questionnaire. There were many categories.
After that, I seated in front of a mirror and I was waiting for a while with browsing a magazine. A staff came to me to show a menu and asked me to choose a drink. It was like a cafe. I chose a cup of caramel flavored tea, but it was too sweet.
Then, another staff in charge of me came and we discussed about my hair. Next, she brought a kind of microscope and looked into my hair and head skin using like a bar code. We saw them through a computer screen. It was the first experience for me to look my own hair and head skin, but I was a little embarrassed.
I asked her to make me look younger. She advised that my bangs be increased. Before that, I had few bangs.
While she was cutting and coloring my hair, the first staff came to me again and I chose the second drink.
After a while, I moved to a washing place. Being washed with sitting was the first time for me as well. The staff in charge of me said that the chair was the state-of-the-art, but it was uncomfortable to me. I prefered a lie-down seat.
She then gave me massages not only my shoulders, but also my neck and head. She said that some parts of my head were stiffed. I was surprised to hear that because I heard of it for the first time.

Eventually, the charge was more expensive than that of previous hair salon. However, I was satisfied with my new hair style.
Some people said that I became look younger. I was very happy to hear that.
A Filipino said that Japanese and Korean often have bangs. It was interesting to hear that.

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The staff gave me a set of shampoo and conditioner sample. There was a harb leaf in a shampoo bottle.

(After I ran out of the shampoo, I knew the leaf was artificial.)








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Original Article:

Spring has come here !

I changed my hair style a little.

Several weeks ago, I called my favorite hair salon to book, but unfortunately it was fully booked already on that day. I then called there again a week later, but it was busy again.
I remembered that my friend had recommended me her favorite hair salon, so I booked and went there for the first time.

The salon was more spacious than the outside appearance, and there were many staff there. While I was waiting, I filled in a questionnaire. There were many categories.
After that, I seated in front of a mirror and I was waiting for a while with browsing a magazine. A staff came to me to show a menu and asked me to choose a drink. It was like a cafe. I chose a cup of caramel flavored tea, but it was too sweet.
Then, another staff in charge of me came and we discussed about my hair. Next, she brought a kind of microscope and looked into my hair and head skin using like a bar code. We saw them through a computer screen. It was the first experience for me to look my own hair and head skin, but I was a little embarrassed.

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Recommended Corrections:

Spring has arrived!

I changed my hair style a little.

Several weeks ago, I called my favorite hair salon to book an appointment. Unfortunately, it was already fully booked for the day. I again called there a week later, but, once again, it was too busy. I remembered that my friend had recommended her favorite hair salon, so I booked an appointment with them for the first time.

The salon was more spacious inside than how it appeared to be from the outside, and there were many staff members busily working. While I was waiting, I filled in a questionnaire. There were many categories of questions to fill out.

After that, I sat in front of a mirror and browsed through a magazine as I waited. A staff member came to me, showed me a menu, and asked me to choose a drink. It was like a cafe. I chose a cup of caramel flavored tea, but it was too sweet.
Then, the staff member in charge of me came and we discussed about my hair. Next, she brought a kind of microscope and looked closely at my hair and scalp. We saw the images of them through a computer screen. It was the first time I had seen my hair and scalp under high magnification, and I was a little embarrassed.

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Original Article:

I asked her to make me look younger. She advised that my bangs be increased. Before that, I had few bangs.
While she was cutting and coloring my hair, the first staff came to me again and I chose the second drink.
After a while, I moved to a washing place. Being washed with sitting was the first time for me as well. The staff in charge of me said that the chair was the state-of-the-art, but it was uncomfortable to me. I prefered a lie-down seat.
She then gave me massages not only my shoulders, but also my neck and head. She said that some parts of my head were stiffed. I was surprised to hear that because I heard of it for the first time.

Eventually, the charge was more expensive than that of previous hair salon. However, I was satisfied with my new hair style.
Some people said that I became look younger. I was very happy to hear that.
A Filipino said that Japanese and Korean often have bangs. It was interesting to hear that.

The staff gave me a set of shampoo and conditioner sample. There was a harb leaf in a shampoo bottle.

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Recommended Corrections:

I asked her to make me look younger. She advised that the width of my bangs be increased. Before my style change, *my bangs were minimal, and had tapered down the sides of my face.

*As I don't know how you wear your hair, I had to make an assumption. It was either this, or that you wear your hair back in a pony tail.

While she was cutting and coloring my hair, the first staff member came to me again, and I chose a second drink.
After a while, I moved to a hair washing station. This was another first time experience for me, as I had never had my hair washed from a seated position. The staff in charge of me said that the chair was state-of-the-art, but I had found it to be uncomfortable. I preferred a fully reclining seat.
The lady who had washed my hair then massaged, not only my shoulders, but also my neck and head. She said that some parts of my head were stiff. I was surprised to hear this because I had never before been told this.

While it was more expensive here than at my previous salon, I was satisfied with my new hair style.
Some people said that I looked younger. I was very happy to hear this.
A Filipino said that Japanese and Koreans often have bangs. It was interesting to hear *this.

*'This' and 'that' are often used interchangeably, however, as you were talking about the time you were actually there and had heard it there at the time... you would use 'this'. You could use 'that' using the same example, but you would have to be talking in a different time frame to do so. Ex... I have often heard that from some of my friends.
Although you could technically use 'that' as you had, as a reader, they are pulled from then, to the present, as they would be understanding that you are talking to them from later. It pulls the reader out of his imagery of him being there with you at the time, to him sitting at his computer and reading of your exploits, instead of him seeing you from a third person perspective.


The staff gave me a sample set of shampoo and conditioner. There was *an herb leaf in the shampoo bottle.

*In American English, we do not pronounce the 'h' in herb. However, in British English, they do.



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I'm glad you like your new hairstyle. :)

Re: English Corrections

Hi, Shiroi Tora.

Thank you very much for the corrections.
When I was a teenager, I wore my hair back in a pony tail.
Thank you for explanation of 'this' and 'that'. I hope I can use them correctly next time.

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Hi, Always visiting.

Thank you! I should go there again before too long.

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